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One Perfect Moment
by Leem
Illustrated by IDarkshadowI

This is a complete reworking of my story One Perfect Moment in screenplay form. I’ve stripped down the plot to its basics and modified the ending, with a nod to Haiku: Temporal Observance by Dan Standing. I’ve also flipped the viewpoint from Elzia’s to Siderea’s. The original version would have required incredibly expensive visual effects, of the kind that aren’t normally lavished on erotic movies (or so I hear). This version could be shot in a room with two actresses, some cheap editing effects and a few optional close-ups of the time watch. If anyone wants to go for it, just be sure to credit me as writer and send me a copy. I guess some of Siderea’s narration might seem a bit wordy and would have to be cut in performance, but that’s just me as a writer wanting to make sure the reader gets all the relevant plot details.

Alternative titles I considered for this version include Time and Time Again, What Comes Around, and - you’ll surely thank me for not using this last one - Come Again.

(Int. Siderea’s apartment bedroom - day. Ideally the decor should look vaguely futuristic but not expensive. There’s a digital clock on the bedside cabinet, which currently reads 2:56 PM. The only other special props are Elzia’s watch/time machine and some erotic drawings as described below.

(Siderea is a gorgeous dancer in her early 20s, currently dressed in equally futuristic [but of course easily removable] casual clothes. We find her pacing the room nervously, with an occasional glance at the clock.)

Siderea (muttering to herself)

Today’s the day, I just know it is. The day that either I get arrested for so-called indecency, or... (She sighs and glances at the clock again. It’s now 2:57.) Well, if she’s coming, she’d better hurry up. That’s if she’s even real, that is.

Siderea - narrating
Note: all of Siderea’s narration is in a kind of breathless whisper, almost
as if she’s coming the whole time she’s narrating... hold that thought.

No wonder I was nervous. It isn’t every day you get to meet the girl of your dreams... the girl you want to be with forever.

(Suddenly, muffled by the walls of the apartment, we hear a sudden orgasmic moan that seems to be coming [sorry] from the next room. Startled, Siderea stops pacing and stands waiting, partly in anticipation and partly in fear.)

Siderea - narrating

Somebody in the apartment next door? There wasn’t supposed to be anyone there. It had been empty for months.

(Siderea sits on the bed, breathing heavily.)

Siderea (whispers to herself)

Oh, gods, please let it be her. Don’t let it all be in my imagination.

(Siderea takes another look at the clock. It’s still 2:57. After a brief pause we hear the muffled sound of the neighbouring apartment’s door opening and closing. A moment later there is a quiet knock on Siderea’s door. Siderea takes a deep breath, then stands and walks nervously toward the door.)

Siderea - narrating

Had my dream girl really come to rescue me, or had they finally come to arrest me? I was afraid to find out. Whoever was on the other side of that door, I knew my life was about to change forever. Oh, gods, there’s that word again.

(Siderea hesitates in front of the door... but then takes a deep breath and reaches for the handle. NB: if we can somehow arrange for a Star Trek-style sliding door that’s opened by a wall button, even better.

(The door opens. Standing in the doorway is a stunning young woman of about Siderea’s age, dressed in nothing but a large bath towel and looking a bit flushed. This, we are soon to discover, is Elzia. Siderea gasps and puts a hand over her mouth. Elzia seems to assume that this is just due to surprise at her current state of undress.)

Siderea - narrating

I couldn’t believe it. It was her! She was real! And she spoke the words that I’d always heard her speak in my dreams...

Elzia

Um... Siderea... I’m not quite sure how to tell you this, but... I’m from the future.

Siderea

(Laughs nervously) You know, I’d say that was crazy. But then, I’m crazy too, so you’d better come in, hadn’t you... Elzia?

Elzia

(Nonplussed) But how... how did you know my...?

Siderea

(Hustling her inside and closing the door) Come on, come inside before someone sees you.

(Once inside, Siderea moves to the bedside cabinet and takes out a sheaf of four or five drawings.)

I know who you are, Elzia. I’ve always known. I’ve been dreaming about you all my life. The girl from the future who was going to rescue me when the bad times came. (She hands Elzia the drawings. The first two are erotic nudes of Elzia. The rest depict Siderea and Elzia making red-hot love, exactly as they will later in the scene. Elzia stares at them in astonishment.)

Elzia

Dear gods. I never thought... all these years I’ve been watching the recordings of your erotic dances and wishing that I’d lived in your time... I never imagined that you could have known about me as well

Siderea

I drew those myself a couple of years ago, but I dreamt them long before that. If anyone found us looking at them we’d both get arrested for sure, now the new government has clamped down on “indecency”. But that’s why you’re here, isn’t it, Elzia? To take me away before they can.

Elzia

(She nods, placing the drawings on the bed.) I thought I was crazy to be so obsessed with you, until I met this girl who claimed to be a time traveller and she told me we could be together. She must have sent you those visions so you’d know I was coming. (Elzia shows Siderea that she’s wearing what looks like a high-tech wristwatch.) I guess you’ve seen this in your visions, haven’t you?

Siderea

(Chuckles) Oh, yes. A time machine that looks like an ordinary watch but runs on orgasms. I’ve had quite a few fantasies about that!

Elzia

Believe me, Siderea, your fantasies can’t even come close to the reality. I’ve only had one solo run and that was pretty intense. With the two of us, it’s bound to be unbelievable.

Siderea

(Sighs) Oh, Elzia. I can’t believe it’s coming true at last. After all these years of thinking you weren’t real...

Elzia

I know. I thought you were just an image from the past and I’d never get to meet the real you. But now...

(They embrace and kiss passionately for a long... long... long moment. Eventually Elzia gently disengages.)

Hey, not too fast, Siderea. We mustn’t use up our sexual energy before it’s time to go.

Siderea

I suppose not. So... how much time do we have anyway?

Elzia

According to my time-travelling friend, they come to arrest you at 3:48 PM and find you gone. That gives us plenty of time to let our sexual energy build up. (She makes a few adjustments to her watch, and it bleeps quietly.) There. The time and space coordinates are set.

Siderea

(She starts to undress, folding her clothes neatly. Elzia does the same with her towel.) I’d better get ready, then. I suppose I can’t take anything to the future with me?

Elzia

No, sorry. Nothing will transport except the time machine and our bodies. I was just lucky someone had left a clean towel in the empty apartment. I wouldn’t have wanted to get arrested for indecency before I could rescue you.

Siderea

(During the following speech she picks up the drawings and takes a last wistful look at them before putting them back in the drawer) Pity to leave the drawings behind. I suppose they’ll get confiscated as porn. Elzia - what happens after I disappear? Are things better in the future?

Elzia

Yes, Siderea. Much better. When you disappeared people assumed you’d been arrested. Nobody believed the police when they said they couldn’t find you. Everyone thought you’d been secretly executed. That was the last straw. The resistance movement got so much popular support after that, that eventually the government collapsed and democracy was restored.

Siderea

Wow. So you’re not only saving me, you’re saving the future as well. I never knew I was that important.

Elzia

You’ve always been important to me, Siderea. I thought you were the past, but now I realise - you’re my future.

Siderea

And you’re my dream come true, Elzia.

(They embrace and start caressing each other. Elzia briefly glances at her watch.)

Elzia

The program’s beginning. We’ll materialise in my apartment one second after I left.

Siderea

(Gasping as a sudden burst of pleasure overtakes her) Whoa... hey. Was that the time machine?

Elzia

Yes, Elzia. (Optional insert shot showing detail of time watch dial, which reads STIMULATION LEVEL - 5%) It’ll stimulate our nerve impulses until we reach the ultimate peak of ecstasy, and then...

Siderea

When we come, we go.

Elzia

(Grins) Exactly. And we’ve got until 3:47, so there’s no need to rush things.

Siderea

(Sighs) I can’t wait to visit the future with you.

Elzia

Well, if you want to see the future there’s no time like the present.

Siderea - narrating

(Sighs ecstatically) Be careful what you wish for.

(Siderea and Elzia make love, on the bed and off it and all over the room; slowly and gently at first, but gradually building in urgency and intensity until they are indulging in the hottest, hardest and horniest piece of girl-on-girl action ever committed to the screen. From time to time we see optional watch inserts showing STIMULATION LEVEL - 20%, then 38%, 47%, 63%, 78%, 89%... you get the idea. Meanwhile the clock creeps closer and closer toward 3:47. By the time it reaches 3:47:00 Siderea and Elzia are back on the bed and the watch reads STIMULATION LEVEL - 99%. Siderea and Elzia gasp and moan quietly as their orgasm washes over them. The watch dial reads TIME TRANSFER IMMINENT.

Siderea - narrating

It was incredible. It was so intense, I was sure I could feel everything that Elzia was feeling and she could feel everything I was feeling! It was the most perfect moment of our lives, and just when we thought it couldn’t get any stronger...

(It’s now 3:47:20. The watch reads STIMULATION LEVEL - 100% - and then STIMULATION LEVEL begins to alternate with OVERLOAD! as the reading starts to increase! First 120%, then 190%, then 280%, 410%... then, as the clock reaches 3:47:40 the STIMULATION LEVEL reading holds steady at 500% while Siderea and Elzia can only gasp in helpless ecstasy. NB: If we can’t afford the graphics, all of this will just have to be suggested by the quality of the acting!)

Siderea - narrating

Oh, merciful gods, it was unbelievable. I’d never dreamed it was possible to feel this much pleasure. I never wanted it to end. Like I said, be careful what you wish...

(The watch reads TIME TRANSFER IN PROGRESS, still alternating with OVERLOAD!, as the bedside clock nudges up to 3:47:59... and then the clock instantly cuts back to 3:47:40... and the last 20 seconds of orgasm play out all over again!)

Siderea - narrating

At first I didn’t understand what had happened. We were still coming, and it was still unbelievable, but we hadn’t arrived in the future yet.

(The watch reads TIME TRANSFER IN PROGRESS, still alternating with OVERLOAD!, as the bedside clock nudges up to 3:47:59... and then the clock instantly cuts back to 3:47:40... and the last 20 seconds of orgasm play out all over again!

(And in terms of visuals, that’s all that happens from this point on... the last 20 seconds of orgasm keep on playing out all over again, until the final fadeout! NB: Ideally this scene should be shot from lots of angles for variety - hopefully our actresses won’t mind! - and we don’t need to see the watch dial after the first couple of times.)

Siderea - narrating

Then I realised. We weren’t going to the future after all.

When we came, we went, just like Elzia said. When they come to arrest me at 3:48 I won’t be there. The future is safe, even though I won’t get to see it. Only, instead of jumping forward in time however many years, we jumped back instead. Not far - just a few seconds... just long enough to come all over again, and then jump back again, and come again, and jump back again... and again... and again... and again...

Oh, gods. Oh, sweet gods. We’re having the best orgasm of our lives... maybe the best orgasm anyone’s ever had... and it’s never going to end! EVER! We can’t turn off the time machine, even if we wanted to. We don’t have free will any more. We can’t do anything except endlessly repeat our movements as we come and come and come...

Did something go wrong with the time machine, or... or did Elzia’s time traveller friend program it this way? There’s no way we’ll ever know. Not that we’d complain, even if we could.

Elzia said there’s no time like the present. Well, for us there’s no time any more except the present. It’s 3:47 and we’re coming. It’s always 3:47 and we’re always coming. A trillion years from now it’ll still be 3:47 and we’ll still be coming.

(Sighs) Oh, Elzia. It isn’t every day you get to meet the girl of your dreams... the girl you want to be with... forever...!

(We continue to show the girls coming over and over in their time loop for as long as we think the audience feels like watching, and then... fade out!)

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